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Basketball---My Favorite

I’m a tall and lively boy. I like playing basketball very much because it’s interesting. I like NBA, too. There are many famous stars in it. Such as Alan Iverson, Tim Dunkin, Jordan, Kobe, O’Neal and so on. Yao Ming is in the NBA, too. He’s Chinese. He plays basketball well. He’s a center forward. He’s our pride. All the ball stars can jump, shoot and pour in the basket. So each game of the NBA is wonderful. Sometimes the players can perform miracles, I think.
This year’s champion is Spur Team. It’s one of the strongest contenders.
I like NBA. I love basketball.

1. 正文第一段中like playing basketball… like doing结构使用恰当准确。

2.正文第一句子中lively 改为active最好,可以体现作者的活力和爱好运动。

3. 正文第一段中He’s Chinese. He plays basketball well. He’s a center forward. He’s our pride. 划线部分应放在He’s Chinese.之后,意义才连贯。

4.正文第一段中最后一句Sometimes the players can perform miracles, I think.这个句子中,划线单词后面缺少地点应该加上in the games

5. .正文第二段中It’s one of the strongest contenders. 语法结构准确,意义简练。

6.结尾I like NBA. I love basketball like和 love使用恰到好处。书写出了本文的点睛之笔。生动体现了作者活泼喜爱运动的形象。

审题准确,叙述条理清晰,行文紧凑合理。大部分语法点准确,极个别词汇运用不够准确,总得来说,达到了题目的要求.

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