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I love my parents

Who gives me birth? Who brings me up? Who dedicates his/her whole life to me? My parents.
Who gives me food? Who gives me clothes? Who gives me care? My parents.
My parents, they don’t want to get any reward from me. Not only my parents, all the parents in the world don’t charge anything from their children. They give us everything they can. They spend their whole life loving me, so I love my parents, too. Since I was given birth, I’ve started to love them even if I didn’t realize it.
It will be the time for my birthday soon. I want to say to my parents: I love you.


第四段第四句话中的“me”应该为“us”,和上一句反复应保持一致,其后逗号改为句号。下一句“so”应大写。最后一句话中由“since”引导的时间状语,其主句中应为延续性动词,“evev if”引导的从句中应为现在时,主从句时态要保持一致,因此此句应为“Since I was given birth, I have been loving them even if I don’t realize it.”
评语:本文写出了作者对父母的爱的认识以及自己的感悟,内容切题,结构安排合理,行文流畅紧凑,是篇优秀的文章,特别是前两段中的排比、设问以及前两段的反复等修辞的运用彰显出作者写作功底深厚。文中无拼写错误,个别语法点运用不够熟练,出现失误。今后的写作中应多加注意。

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