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How to get along well with my clessmate

There are many students in my class.I have seversl ideas about geting along well with them.
First,I should know what they like and what they dislike.

Second,I should try to have interested in the things they like.

Third,I should try to be a warm-hearted boy and try to have a talk with them now and then.

The most important thing is that I should pay attention to our friendship.I think if I do like these,I can get along well with my classmates.


1.标题中classmate应该加 "s”指班里的同学们。

2. 第一段第二句话中geting应为getting. get 为重读闭音节,且末尾只有一个辅音字母,加-ing 时应双写 "t"。

3.第二段可直接写做" First, I should try to know what they like and dislike." 使句子更加简练。

4.第三段中"have interested in"应为固定短语"have/take (an) interest in"。本句中定语从句运用的很好。

5.第四段中"have a talk" 最好改为"have a chat /conversation"。"talk”一般为较郑重的谈话,"chat"指较为亲切的闲聊,闲谈。常为个人的情况等。"conversation" 指亲切的交谈,常以交流思想或情况为目的。本句中"now and then" 运用得体恰当,值得学习。

6.最后一段中可在"The most important thing"后加入一个插入语" ,I think," 更能体现此为作者个人想法,使上下更加连贯。第二句话中的"these"应该为"this".表示这样做。

评语:本文衔接紧密,中心明确。是一篇佳作。文中个别单词拼写有误,应注意词的变化形式。短语记忆有所混淆,应多加练习运用。若把本文二、三、四段和第五段的第一句话归为一段,结构组织会更加得体。

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