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A happy trip

Last year,my friendsand I went to climb Mount Tai during summer holiday.We met at the gate of my house.We got there by bus.And we began to climb it when we got there.The flowers and plants there were very beautiful.And visitors were very excited and surprised.The air there is very fresher than it in cities.And the sunrise was very beautiful.We had a picnic and took many photos.The sights there were very beautiful.We were very tired but we were very happy because we had a good time .



Last year,my friendsand I went to climb Mount Tai during summer holiday. 这句中的summer holiday前应加顶冠词the,因为是去年的暑假.




The air there is very fresher than it in cities.这句中的it用的不对,应该用that. it用来指上文提到的同一事物,that用来指代与上文提到的事物同类的事物(可数名词单数或不可数名词),并且是特指,如果是复数名词用those,例如:



The weather in Beijing is much colder than that in Shanghai.



The apples in this basket are bigger than those in that one.



And the sunrise was very beautiful.We had a picnic and took many photos.The sights there were very beautiful.We were very tired but we were very happy because we had a good time

Last year,my friendsand I went to climb Mount Tai during the summer holiday.




The air there is very fresher than that in cities.



作者的英语功底比较扎实,有一定的语言运用能力;但所写的句子较单一,基本上都是简单句:主+谓+宾.所以小作者应该在句式上多下些功夫,使自己的句子更加丰富多彩.


1 没有太多的语法错误.时态\人称等用的很到位.




2 意思表达的非常明晰.基本工很扎实,具有较好的语言表达能力.




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