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My Favourite Singer

She is such an ideal singer!
She is a girl with a lot of talent. She is a girl but she has individuality like a boy. On the stage, she sings and dances so well. She is so happy and she makes us excited… Can you guess who she is? Yes, she is Li Yuchun, the winner of “Super Girl 2005.”
She is a student of Sichuan Music College in Grade 3. She is twenty-one this year. She is 1.74 metres tall. Now she is very popular in China and even in the world. I know she worked hard in the past, and has succeeded today. I’ll learn from her and try my best to achieve my dream.
I like her because she is so cool and lovely. I love her because she makes me feel happy. I enjoy her because she is independent and she has the individuality of herself.
Li Yuchun, I’ll cheer for you forever!


1.第二段第一句中with应该为of 表示拥有这种才能。a lot of 改为great 表示程度异乎寻常。

2.第二句话中的like改为of 表示拥有这种特征。

3.第四句话中and 要改为that。固定搭配so…that…引导结果状语从句。

4.第三段中第一句话应该为She is a student of Grade 3 of Sichuan Music College. 英语中小地点在前大地点在后。

5.第五句中应用现在完成时,表示一直都在努力,因此取得了现在的成功。

6.第四段中第四句话enjoy her 应该为like 或love。enjoy 后接物不接人。of herself 应该为of her own 表示她自己的。

7.最后一段中cheer为及物动词,因此可直接说I'll cheer you forever!

评语:本篇结构合理,行文紧凑。特别是第一段中通过一系列的描述和最后的设问引出悬念,引起读者的兴趣。是非常好的一篇习作。文中无拼写错误,语法基本无误。但应在遣词造句方面多下功夫。

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